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Post by starlord on Mar 29, 2009 2:39:38 GMT -5
Please let us know what you think!
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Post by starlord on Mar 29, 2009 2:41:55 GMT -5
And let me just say that I really enjoyed this. What you did in this issue was one huge battle scene that was paced exceedingly well. I'm very envious of that because fight scene's are not one of my strong points. I have a lot of respect for anyone who can pull off an entire issue like you did.
Bravo, Sir!
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Post by UltimateDC on Mar 29, 2009 4:16:48 GMT -5
The big action sequence worked here. It's a nice balance, making sure each of the characters are highlited in the fight. However, the dialogue remains a weak point. One particular point just undid the whole thing:
The exposition demon really derailed it for me. Still, there are strong points in the story. The character's voices remain unique and the overall plot is easily to follow (it kinda feels like a video game). I'll still be back next month.
-UDC
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Post by Ammunition88 on Mar 31, 2009 20:54:00 GMT -5
well, that line was made cheesy on purpose, actually lol..... I was watching a good bit of Yu Yu Hakusho at the time I wrote this and I like the way they occasionally insert something kind of cheesy or funny that seems out of place at first, just to break up the monotony..... I tend to always laugh at the dialogue of ancient evil beings in movies and stuff, as it's all cheesy to an extent, and this was a homage to that.... Sorry if it ruined things for you, but I thought it was worth the risk.
Also, it's funny you mention the plot..... like I said, Yu Yu Hakusho has been a big inspiration for me lately. I like how the basic plots are very apparent from the beginning of the season, but still hold you in... you know how things are going to end, but you can't wait to see how it gets there....... then, of course, there are always some shocking, out of left field moments thrown in to keep you on the edge of your seat....... glad you're still reading though and I hope you enjoy the next chapter!
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Post by Ammunition88 on Apr 6, 2009 18:30:07 GMT -5
whoops, stupid me, I missed Brian's comment! sorry about that Brian!.... anyways, thanks for the compliment, it really means a lot. I was scared to death with the fight scene (as I am with any fight scene) so I invested a lot of time into it, making sure I had everything set up just right..... I'm just glad it was well-received..... hope you enjoy the next chapter!
-Cam-
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