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Post by Romans Empire on Feb 20, 2007 18:37:50 GMT -5
Please let us know what you think!
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Post by HoM on Feb 21, 2007 10:49:59 GMT -5
YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS DEADMAN! YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS PHANTOM STRANGER!
FIVE STARRS!
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Post by Admin on Feb 21, 2007 11:16:03 GMT -5
I thought it was a good retelling of his origin, although I was surprised to see the search for the killer wrapped up so soon (just an observation, not a criticism).
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Post by starlord on Feb 21, 2007 15:41:34 GMT -5
Great job! I honestly don't know that much about Deadman, so this was kind of new for me. It was a great read.  |
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Post by arcalian on Feb 21, 2007 15:48:56 GMT -5
I really feel for Boston here. He had a life and a story and it was cut short, just so Phantom Stranger could have an agent.
I barely knew Lorna but I miss her already.
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Post by timdrake on Feb 21, 2007 17:27:07 GMT -5
There's two explanations for that: 1) I left that scene til last and procrastinated until Sunday to write it so I didn't spend as much time on it, and 2) I felt that Hook was in some ways a victim just as Boston was, so I didn't want to make him look too evil. He's definately a bad guy, he is the one who pulled the trigger, but he is just as much a pawn as Boston and there are bigger forces at work.
Actually, the Phantom Stranger is an agent of Order, and he is just trying to help Boston through this situation. I don't want to reveal too much about exactly who is involved and the reason Boston was killed (since those questions are a big part of the second half of the story), but even the Phantom Stranger doesn't know the whole story.
I'm glad that people are feeling an emotional connection to Boston. I really tried hard in making this a tragic story (and it's only going to get worse for the poor guy).
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Post by David on Feb 21, 2007 17:54:54 GMT -5
I haven't read this yet (but I intend to, soon!), but I just have to say first how impressed I am with the cover! What a great combination of two artists not only complimenting each other, but creating a stunning new whole.
Bravo, gentlemen!
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Post by Romans Empire on Feb 23, 2007 2:35:00 GMT -5
That cover flat out ROCKED! Another supreme effort by the terror twins of Ramon and Craig! Dan really came out swinging on this tale. He found Boston Brands voice and really sucked me in to a fine piece of character fiction. Deadman has always been one of those characters I think DC has always been pretty hit or miss with. When it's bad is when they use his possession ability as a cheap plot gimmick. Here at its best we really feel for this poor sucker! And to think that there are worse things in store for a guy that got killed in the first issue. Thanks for being 'dead' on with this story.  |
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Post by capeandcowl on Feb 24, 2007 1:24:37 GMT -5
Not to put too fine a point on this....but I LOVED this story. A cool mix of narrative styles and really strong writing....excellent.
For some reason this passage lept out at me: All of a sudden, a chill went up my spine. I heard a gunshot, and everything started getting blurry. I couldn't even tell looking down at my blood red uniform. I let go of the trapeze, and seconds later I was out cold. I didn't blackout, instead, I saw my father laughing at me.
Just great work.
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Post by Susan Hillwig on Mar 4, 2007 19:55:29 GMT -5
Interesting story, but it felt rushed all-around. Also, the use of both 1st and 3rd person in this way made the storytelling muddled, especially when you forgot to put the 1st person in italics. Don't worry, I will come back for Part 2.
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Post by timdrake on Mar 18, 2007 10:29:36 GMT -5
Thanks for the criticism (sorry for being so late to respond to it), it actually really helped me with 2 things that i've been writing this week. I wrote the second part of deadman without monologue and i think it reads more smoothly without it jumping back and forth, and luckily you said something right before I was about to do the same thing for an upcoming mini series that I just started.
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Post by Susan Hillwig on Mar 22, 2007 20:00:19 GMT -5
Glad I could help. Clarity is important, especially since we have no pics to go along with the words here -- what works in regular comics doesn't always translate well to straight prose.  |
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