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Post by Admin on Apr 25, 2006 20:17:34 GMT -5
Let us know what you think!
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Post by HoM on Apr 26, 2006 3:26:22 GMT -5
Great conclusion to a story that took its time to grab me... I enjoyed Clark's presence in the story, as it didn't distract from the lead character in any way... Loved the conversation between them, the opening fight with King Snake was amazingly well done and I overall enjoyed the story. Great grasp of the characters, great characterisation and fantastic villains! Well done... But I did find the constant fake swearing distracting from the story, and everytime I came across them it took me a moment away from the story, and I lost the flow... Couldn't you have Winnick'd it?
Because it £$%%^% me off!
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Post by dragonbat on Apr 26, 2006 6:24:28 GMT -5
Hey, glad you liked! Sorry about Grace. I really don't like to swear. But I like Grace. And Grace is one character who must swear. (The foreign phrases used, btw are Cantonese and Mandarin cuss phrases. And I picked a couple of the tamest.) Part of the issue with $%*@ is that I also crosspost these stories to a few other sites. One of the biggest filters out most non-alpha-numeric symbols. So, I opted to use a few tamer words...
See ya in 30!
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Post by HoM on Apr 26, 2006 6:36:27 GMT -5
I'll bleep you up if I don't!
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Post by batarang on Apr 26, 2006 9:36:00 GMT -5
I really like how you portray the constant internal struggle of Dick Grayson. You have a terrific grasp on his complicated relationship with Bruce Wayne; Dick wants to be his own hero (and man) yet he acknowledges his debt to Bruce for his training, even to the point of thinking "what would Bruce do in this situation". I love having Superman as the "mediator" between them; he obviously is as fascinated by their relationship as we are. Clark also provides a good outlet for Dick; someone Dick respects as much as Bruce, but also someone who will listen to him with understanding. I also very much enjoy your writing style, like your description of action sequences and how Dick thinks through them as opposed to blindly reacting to his situation. As a huge bat-fan (obviously) I like this approach as it shows Dick's skills are far beyond being able to beat somebody up (though he can if necessary) and he has a distinct persona apart from Batman. Great run so far, and this is definitely a title I look forward to reading
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Post by dragonbat on Apr 26, 2006 14:00:30 GMT -5
Thanks, kindly! The relationship is a bit of a challenge, because bottom line, as it usually is, neither party is completely right or wrong. The tricky part is NOT making Bruce a jerk or Dick a whiny adolescent...
And yes, Dick is very well aware of what Bruce's training and influence has done for him. He's trying to figure out how much of what he's been taught needs to stick, and when it might be okay to do things a little bit differently.
Really glad you're enjoying the writing. And your comments about the action sequences are especially gratifying--I find those the hardest scenes to write.
See ya in 30!
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Post by starlord on Apr 26, 2006 17:56:50 GMT -5
This is my favorite issue to date, and I've thought they were all great so far. The opening kept me rivited to the screen and the final scene between Dick and Clark was exceptional, to say the least. I can't tell you enough how obvious it is that you have such a firm and incredible grasp on Nightwing. Hats off!
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Post by dragonbat on Apr 26, 2006 20:36:18 GMT -5
(blush) *bows* Thank ye kindly!
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Post by Susan Hillwig on Apr 27, 2006 20:47:25 GMT -5
Best part, hands down: Grace walking into the computer lab and they automatically assume she works for Dorrance! Exactly what I DIDN'T expect! ;D I was hoping for a knock-down, drag-out fight with King Snake, but the kid did good. The Superman stuff was great, mainly because it's not a character that I associate your writing with -- someday, we'll get to see you riff on all the big guns.
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Post by batman123 on Apr 27, 2006 20:50:59 GMT -5
Great story! The intro transitioned very nicely into the fight with King Snake, and I agree with starlord that the conversation with Clark was exceptional. That was probably my favorite part of your story. I don't have much to add to what has already been said. I just wanted to tell you that you are doing a great job with Nightwing. Keep up the good work.
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Post by dragonbat on Apr 27, 2006 21:24:59 GMT -5
Best part, hands down: Grace walking into the computer lab and they automatically assume she works for Dorrance! Exactly what I DIDN'T expect! ;D I was unpredictable? Kewl! Yup. And he's made himself a new nemesis. We'll see. I don't really read a lot of titles outside the Bat-verse, so I don't have the best handle on the other voices. Supes... well, between S/B and Gail's Action run, I had a better idea, but I'd be lost if I had to write Flash. Or Wonder Woman. Or Aquaman. Or Jonah... Thanks for the feedback!
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Post by dragonbat on Apr 27, 2006 21:28:30 GMT -5
Great story! The intro transitioned very nicely into the fight with King Snake, and I agree with starlord that the conversation with Clark was exceptional. That was probably my favorite part of your story. I don't have much to add to what has already been said. I just wanted to tell you that you are doing a great job with Nightwing. Keep up the good work. I had fun with that conversation, too. Glad you enjoyed!
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Post by chris on May 1, 2006 16:25:13 GMT -5
Good issue yet again. Dick is really starting to come into his own. I can alsoo see the confrontation between Bruce and Dick starting to build here. I can't wait for that.
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Post by dragonbat on May 1, 2006 16:33:09 GMT -5
Thanks!
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Post by markymark261 on May 4, 2006 15:28:54 GMT -5
Thought the writing was great and the story very readable. Then again I thought Nightwing was ridiculously lucky - firstly that they didn't consider covering the dart with a decent poison (by the way is Project Venom a reference to Tales of The Dark Knight's Venom arc?), and, secondly, Ling managing to get pricked by the needle he was carrying seemed a bit unlikely. Anyway, after all his being blinded, poisoned and beaten he manages to accomplish exactly nothing - lucky Grace was there (even in her strange bleeping form) to actually get the evidence. Liked the Clark cameo.
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Post by dragonbat on May 4, 2006 19:08:59 GMT -5
What? No typos? (Note to self: give betas big raise...) The issue with the poison IS being addressed in NW #5. I just wrote the scene last night. NW actually did accomplish a few things. He just doesn't know it yet...
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Post by markymark261 on May 5, 2006 10:20:56 GMT -5
What? No typos? (Note to self: give betas big raise...) Well, if you want me to be really picky, I'd have said "blond woman" should have used the feminine spelling of blonde. Also, I believe your capitalisation of letters following speech ending in ? or ! (e.g. "You're alright?" He asks) is erroneous (either that or I've got tons of books full of misprints). Apart from that, it was a grammatical joy to read (many thanks to your beta readers - it's great not to have the distraction of errors), and I even learnt a new word Fewmets.
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Post by dragonbat on May 6, 2006 21:44:43 GMT -5
Credit Madeleine L'Engle for first educating me as to the correct term for dragon droppings in A Wind In the Door. (Term subsequently corroborated by T.H. White in The Once and Future King).
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Post by scuzzlebutt on May 10, 2006 3:14:42 GMT -5
Damn man. You write Nightwing well.
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Post by dragonbat on May 10, 2006 5:31:22 GMT -5
Thanks!
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