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Post by Rik (capricorn116) on Nov 29, 2010 20:20:56 GMT -5
Please tell us what you thought!
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Post by Rik (capricorn116) on Nov 29, 2010 20:21:20 GMT -5
Great second issue! Even better than the first. Poor Maxine!  The small moments really got me and showed what a grasp you have on the characters to make those little things shine through. The cafateria scene between Warren and Rachel was short, but said a lot. I hope we haven't seen the last of Bronze Tiger as well. Keep them coming and I'll keep reading, that's a promise! 5 stars! |
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Post by Rik (capricorn116) on Nov 29, 2010 20:21:43 GMT -5
Great second issue! Even better than the first. Poor Maxine! Thanks man. I've always enjoyed writing character development more than action sequences, and I think it shows. Yeah, I was a fan of that sequence too. Don't worry. I have plans for BT. Again, thank you. I'll try my best to get the next issue up quicker. -UDC |
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Post by Rik (capricorn116) on Nov 29, 2010 20:22:13 GMT -5
It's going alright so far. While that cutaway scene to Maxine was well-done, I think it didn't belong quite in that place. It felt a little...mawkish, to cut back and forth like that. I think it would have been more effective in another issue entirely, and leave the reader wondering what's happened to her. This is the type of issue I normally like a lot, a little slower-paced, a little more character-driven, but it's somehow falling a little flat. The premise is certainly there, and I'm sure you've got great plans for the future. I'm just not quite invested in the characters so far. 3-star
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Post by Rik (capricorn116) on Nov 29, 2010 20:22:46 GMT -5
It's going alright so far. While that cutaway scene to Maxine was well-done, I think it didn't belong quite in that place. It felt a little...mawkish, to cut back and forth like that. I think it would have been more effective in another issue entirely, and leave the reader wondering what's happened to her. This is the type of issue I normally like a lot, a little slower-paced, a little more character-driven, but it's somehow falling a little flat. The premise is certainly there, and I'm sure you've got great plans for the future. I'm just not quite invested in the characters so far. 3-star Sorry you didn't enjoy it. I agree, it would probably be better pacing storywise to move Maxine's flashback to somewhere else. But everyone was having them and I figured it would make sense in her backstory to have one. Hopefully, though, I'll do better next time. Thanks for reading none the less. -UDC |
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