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Post by Admin on Jan 29, 2015 17:42:56 GMT -5
Please let us know what you think!
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Post by HoM on Mar 13, 2015 11:53:40 GMT -5
Okay, let's have a look see then.
As I started reading the issue, this line made me smile, because it was so matter-of-fact and brilliant: Beside him and piloting the craft was John Constantine who, by contrast, wore what he usually wore. Something about it just made me laugh, and that was a great sign. The next few lines I had problems with, because you went from Zach being the main narrative voice, to John, and the effect was jarring. One of things I've been working on in my own stuff outside of the DC2, is latching onto one point-of-view character and sticking to them, which does mean I can't flick between one perspective to another without it being jarring (so I don't do it) but does give me the ability to put some mystery in other characters, because my POV guy / gal doesn't know what everyone else is thinking. If you had an omniscient narrator, dipping in and out of the narrative however you like, that might be better, but I thought it best to share some of my musings on the topic. One of the things I love about writing is talking about style and genre, so this was a nice little attempt at that on the fan-fiction-side of things!
As the issue progressed, it was littered with great lines and moments, such as Eddie's description of the Green: "It's like the internet, but for plants. Sort of?” Eddie gave a hopeful smile. Which I found to be PERFECT.
One of the things I absolutely love about the opportunities we have writing on a fan fiction site is to explore characters and concepts that others don’t. I LOVE alternative histories, futures, whatever. I like exploring things that we don’t get to explore in the mainstream comics universe.
I have a Green Lantern Corps issue written, probably going to hit the site as issue Fifty-Seven, with Kyle Rayner, currently sporting a trendy White Lantern look, arriving in a reality somewhat like our own-- but with startling differences. Those are things I love to do, and the characters reacting to those situations are some of the best writing I feel I’ve done on the site (the Wonder Woman story I wrote called “Era”, is something I loved putting together. Issue twenty-five, maybe?).
Seeing John ‘broken’, Zee struggling to cope, and Eddie being so utterly confused by it all was great storytelling, and makes me worry about my future GLC issue being old hat when it hits (so I might bring it forward, though Don might punch me for it).
The final reveal of who I assume to the main villain of the piece (and who else could corrupt the Green that our old, disfigured enemy?) was great, as was, I assume, Zach, being under his control and sporting some golden headwear that amps up his power to the Nth!
Great issue, ridiculously long feedback, but I’ll be checking out the next issue ASAP.
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Post by hushicho on Mar 13, 2015 12:24:17 GMT -5
I really and truly appreciate all your feedback, and all the time taken to give it. I need to get reading on more here...I've a backlog now of things I've put on the queue, but the last few months have been ridiculously frantic, almost a madhouse around here. Surgeries, injuries, illnesses...hopefully I'll have the time to do what I want to do soon! I've read mainly as research and preparation for the issues, but I really want to read so much more.
It may be a bit odd to say so, but I think if the head-hopping weren't a little jarring, it wouldn't have been what I intended...more than anything I wanted to have this issue kind of jostle expectations. We go in and it's business as usual (and I'm so glad you liked the 'business as usual' description of John), but then it's very much not that anymore. I'm so pleased you liked the possible future, and honestly I wouldn't worry about it being 'old hat' in any way with your own story. I'm sure it will be excellent.
What I wanted to show, most of all, was the importance of the title character, while at the same time developing Eddie, whom I feel I had underused. There is sometimes no more poignant way to illustrate who and what a character is and what they mean than to remove them from the story and make them be missed, to show what they bring to not only the story itself, but to the relationships between the characters. And it's kind of a parallel thing: Eddie's the one removed from the present, and so everyone has to adjust to him being gone, but from Eddie's (and our) perspective, it's Zach.
I'm just so glad you liked it. I hope you'll enjoy the resolution too.
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